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Re: Where IS everybody? :(
I think the discussion of Tuesday's poem ground to a halt because (and I quote): It just sits there like a brick of hardtack, indigestible and useless for almost anything (save as an improvised anchor or weapon). Personally I thought it fairly digestible. (...) I find that reasoning amusing. Comments like mine above have never stopped anyone ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 20, 2008
Re: thursday OPP
You have analyzed this well, MaryAnn, but this poem still does virtually zero for me despite that analysis. Its very language gets in the way of its emotional expression (what little there is of it). It is too jerky -- it gives me no feeling of freedom as a driver in either form or substance, only a sense of foreboding, the kind I get while ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 20, 2008
Re: Where IS everybody? :(
Hi yerself (I say in my best imitation of the late great Tumbleweeds), I think MaryAnn's explanation -- that the ''lightning bolt is made entirely of error'' is meant only to contrast its randomness to the precision with which a computer-generated nuclear attack strikes -- is correct. Hmm... Computers can deliver nuclear explosions to ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 20, 2008
Thumbs up to both of you...
...and to A.R. Ammons for pointing out the idiotic conceit of some of his contemporaries. but thatsaid the mountain does notexcuse the stanceor dictionand next if you're not carefulyou'll bearriving at wayswater survives its motions. How wonderfully precious is that? :)
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 17, 2008
Yes, you hit it on the head...
Unless one is dealing with truly universal themes expressed in truly simple language, one can't reach everyone. But the aim of mass communication is to reach as many as possible, without losing sight of the fact that there is a target audience. Poetry is a form of mass communication. So maybe I should clarify what I meant in the sentence you ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 11, 2008
Re: Seriously, WTF am I supposed to do with this?
MaryAnn:Alas, foobs, the sonnet form does not lend itself to a jazz riff. MA But it lends itself well to a scathing critique of a jazz riff from a classicist's point of view. :) wr ()()
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 11, 2008
Rhyming Sun Tzu's "The Art of War"
MaryAnn:King Foobs, you may claim to be well versed in the great art of war, but can you rhyme Sun Tzu or Clausewitz? MA Well, Foobs, if you want to try to put Sun Tzu's The Art of War into rhyme, here's your chance. MaryAnn, if Foobs is sufficiently struck by what he reads on that page, then he will rhyme some of it -- depend on it. :) It is ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on May 26, 2008
Re: thursday OPP
islandtime:Hi, Ted - I agree that the ''ease of line transition,'' as you call it, is a biggy. I think Bell has a little leeway here just because of his doo-wop theme -- the reader might expect a little jumping around, as in a musical piece. But it's a fine line between jumpy and choppy, a very fine line. It reminds me of one of those spy movies ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on May 19, 2008
Re: I'm not quite sure what to make of this...
MaryAnn: First, it doesn't come from what I've come to call (within my own head) ''the National Geographic school of free verse''. That is, it doesn't take an expressive prose text that would work perfectly well in a good article from National Geographic, chop up its syntax in a more or less arbitrary fashion, and then arrange the results in ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on May 14, 2008
We await your return...
...meanwhile, I have to agree with Foobs. ''Give this guy a check, a gold star'' (we used to have those things for worthy posters) ''and a statue in the local city park.'' If I said anything like what you just said (especially at the end), some people here might think me crazy. Somehow when you say it, it carries more weight in my ears...probably ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on May 7, 2008

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