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Re: Wretched execution (right job, wrong tool)
Interesting explanation of what you think is the problem. Maybe in my case, the problem is that I write like I read and I read like I write. Either way, I get almost as puzzled as you at what we get on Tuesdays. Wretched execution, eh? Why then is the language so relatively elegant of itself? That's worth thinking about. It's as if the condemned ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 22, 2008
Re: The medium is the message
Dear HAP, The medium is the message... No one would agree more quickly than I. That's precisely why I raised the issues I did in the first place. Whatever else the poem is, it's not oriented toward people like me who try to hew to the line of form following function. I don't need to have a poem's structure toyed with arbitrarily in order to ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 14, 2008
Re: A bristle of wings on the anime
falcon:I mentioned in another post one explanation - the break at simple implies two different ways to read the following lines. That's lost in your edition. Also: a choice of varying line length. You've given a perfectly sufficient explanation: Certainly the resulting effect is different. Yeah, I was afraid of missing something in the structure ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 13, 2008
Re: A bristle of wings on the anime
Foobs:As a huge Hayao Miyazaki fan, I feel compelled to ask what anime you've been watching... Reading the other posts about the poem, I'm struck by how different all the ''what it's about''s are. To my mind, if people don't agree on what you're saying, you either aren't saying anything or you aren't saying it well. There are certainly ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 13, 2008
Re: A bristle of wings on the anime
waltz and capsize: only time enough to note I'd mentioned you in ref. to this poem just this morning. from another thread: (On this score, we miss, in discussion of Bristle, White Rabbit, who seems to order his life by Occam. He always thinks horses, never zebras-- unless he's on the Serengeti.) Have you ever been on the Serengeti, WR? To ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 13, 2008
A bristle of wings on the anime
The whole poem reminds me of a Far Eastern setting...one could make a nice anime vignette out of this. (Since I've been seeing a lot of anime lately, for me the comparison just begs to be made.) My only other (and quite predictable) comment for now about this lovely poem is a query: why couldn't Ms. Cader just follow the normal rules of syntax in ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 13, 2008
Re: What if Dr. Seuss taught particle physics?
And you would brook no argument from me…and dang! I wish I had written that. I've received some very nice complements as a writer over the years, but that may top every one in my book. You made my day with that. Thanks! wr ()()
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 4, 2008
Nice!
''Not seeing the forest for the trees''...good one! Small suggestion with regard to meter: I think that I shall never seeThat tree as it was meant to beUnless I comprehend at allThe forest where that tree may fall Here possibly informal grammar (in the last line) is less a fault than not sticking to the exact poetic foot. Nash stuck to it ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 4, 2008
Re: What if Dr. Seuss taught particle physics?
HAP: I really must learn more about particle physics. One thing for sure, as little as I may know about poetry, there were some very smart people who knew perhaps even less. Pual Dirac on how to make friends and influence people on the Poetry Fray: “Dirac's aesthetic sensibilities did not extend to poetry of the literary kind. On hearing ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on August 3, 2008
Enormous LOL!!!! :)
Killer! This is getting more fun as it goes... :) Point taken: I keep forgetting the difference between my style of parody and your style of mockery (or of resurrection). Bon weekend,wr ()()
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on July 25, 2008

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