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Clarifying a potential misunderstanding
White_Rabbit: (...) I have to admit that these are my favorite lines: After a few years, they get over him.They tell their new boyfriends how amazing it was, like living with another woman, but without the spite, the envy,and with a man's strength, a man's clarity of mind. And the men tolerate this, they even smile.They stroke the woman's ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 12, 2009
Re: Another thought for you Wabbit ()()
I am pretty sure that the protagonist would be seen much more readily as the fool that he is. And the poem would've become very interesting, rather like a train wreck is interesting. :) I have to admit that these are my favorite lines: After a few years, they get over him.They tell their new boyfriends how amazing it was, like living with ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 12, 2009
Re: "Home, Home ... of the Strange"
Contempo: Bravo! One of your best -- yet. As to the original poem, it is far too long (imho, along with others, it seems) and it is far too repetitive. LG could have used such length to develop the poem & the unfortunate character farther & more deeply; instead she just went on & on, saying the same two things about five times, ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 11, 2009
Re: "In the Cafe" as a limerick
Almost any contemporary poem, I'd say. And when one so distills it, one often reaches the inane heart of the original -- a heart that might not be so easily spotted any other way. As I said, I don't mind the length or the style of ''In the Cafe''. It's the inanity at its heart that I mind. (cracks his literary knuckles) You're nat'rally tired ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 11, 2009
Re: Good Grief MaryAnn
Hi MaryAnn, To be fair, and as I tried to make clear at the outset, it's not the poem I disrespect, nor the poet -- neither as poem qua poem nor as poet qua poet. The poem is worthy enough and the poet good at the craft (at least IMO-FWIW). It would be foolish for me to try to engage such a poem at the level that someone like Paul Breslin does. ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 11, 2009
"In the Cafe": Home of the Strange
This one's just too easy a mark. It's not that this poem is too long. It's not that this poem is too silly. It's not even that it's bad poetry (actually, I rather like it qua poetry: it's accessible without being pablum, and very enjoyable in its style and euphony). It's that it makes considerable light of, and really relates in impossible terms, ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 11, 2009
A period?
I hope that means something good, not neutral or bad!
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 5, 2009
My turn (from my front-page review)...
I suppose I could argue that form(Were it stricter: some classical norm)Would improve this as such...But (no doubt) it's too muchTo expect those near death to conform. wr ()()
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 2, 2009
"Ocean": short review and limerick
Before I read this poem, I ''cheated''. I read the limerical thread on the poem (started by denny), and then islandtime's thread on the poem. (Give me a break, I just got back from London.) After reading it I wondered if the poet (or rather his protagonist) was thinking of John Denver's song, Goodbye Again. It has a ''catchy'', if melancholy ...
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on June 2, 2009
Re: No limerick for this week's Pinsky Pick.
Belatedly (and unsurprisingly) I applaud your choice. Myself, I wouldn't touch this poem with a ten-foot parody either. All the same, I think the first half is strangely incoherent as a poem (qua poem). It's the second half that has a stark clarity emerge, reach up from the deathbed and grab you by the collar to whisper its message. wr ()()
Posted to Poems by White_Rabbit on May 22, 2009

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